I agree with this. We have grammar mistakes aplenty, misstatements of fact (the verdict , the Olympic info, etc.), and a generally rambling structure. I mean, even subject-verb agreement errors. It’s rather astonishing for me as we corporate types would get our arses handed to us for this many drafting errors PRIOR to a document going out to the counterparty, let alone being submitted to a court.
But, most fatal of all, is that the overall tone is emotional to the point of histrionics. It is the exact opposite of the professional tone demonstrated by the SGF and Barisone filings. One of the primary benefits of hiring a good lawyer is that they are able to advocate vigorously on your behalf without the emotional reaction you yourself might have given your personal involvment. In filings like this, a good lawyer would take emotion out of the argument, not inject his own. It reads like a full blown tantrum, not a professionally drafted and crafted legal document. I mean, after his breathtakingly unprofessional comments about the jury, this should not be surprising, but still…
My personal favourite bit is, and I paraphrase, ‘there are many mean things in those filings that do not deserve response; now allow me to respond to at least two of the things that I proclaim do not deserve a response’.
Um, okay, you go on and embrace a complete lack of internal logical consistency in your drafting, I guess?